It's awkward here - not because of grammar, but because of word choice. "Declare" is a strong word. It's emphatic and formal. Because of that, it's unusual - even suspicious - for the person (entity) making the declaration to be unknown or unnamed.
Because of that, a passive construction makes it seem that something is missing, and the reader is left to wonder about it. Does the writer know who made the declaration, but isn't divulging the information? Or does the writer happen to not know? Or is it something that no one knows?
I would recommend using an active construction, saying something like, "An unnamed source declares..." but even then, I would strongly consider a synonym like "states."
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